EXAMINER’S EXPLANATION
Band 5
“The reason for writing is very clear in this letter but it is not clear who the letter is to. The writer gives information to cover all three bullet points, but only one is well extended, and the whole response is underlenght at 135 words, so it loses marks for this.
The information is organised and it is easy to follow the message. A range of linkers is used across the answer and they are generally accurate, but in some places, especially the first paragraph, sentences are not well-linked.
The range of vocabulary is sufficient for the task and there are some quite precise expressions. There are no errors in word form, but some very basic spelling errors occur. In terms of grammar, the range is rather limited with many very short sentences and few complex structures. Grammar is generally well-controlled, however, with only a few minor errors and occasional inappropriate punctuation.”
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course.
Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter,
- describe the situation
- explain why you cannot continue at this time
- say what action you would like to take
Write at least 150 words.
Model answer
Dear Sir,
I am writing to inform you that I will need to withdraw from the weekday evening course due to unavoidable circumstances.
My name is Kabir, and I am currently enrolled in the weekday batch that runs from 7:00 PM to 8:30 PM. Alongside this, I am employed full-time from 9:00 AM to 6:00 PM at a multinational company. Due to the upcoming festival season and a shortage of staff, I have been required to work overtime.
Managing both work and study has become increasingly difficult and has started affecting my health over the past two weeks. I have tried to attend fewer classes to cope, but this has only added to the pressure and made it harder to keep up with the course content.
I kindly request to withdraw from the current weekday batch and transfer to the weekend batch scheduled from 10:00 AM to 12:00 PM. This schedule would be more suitable for me. Thank you for your understanding.
Yours faithfully,
Kabir
(168 words)